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发表于 2009-3-9 10:46
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贴一篇儿子的英语作文
上周老师布置的命题作文作业,要求写出中秋节的来历。贴上来向大家请教,看看如何能改得好一些。
The Mid Autumn Festival
HouYi was born five thousand years ago in China. At the time, there were ten suns in the sky, the world was very hot. HouYi climbed up the mountain and shot nine suns. Then he married ChangE. She was very beautiful.
One day, HouYi went to the mountain and took the medicine that can let people live on the moon forever. He put it in the drawer. One day, HouYi went out and ChangE stayed at home. The thief came into HouYi’s house. He wanted to take the medicine. But it was too late, ChangE ate the medicine! ChangE flew to the moon, and lived in the Moon Palace. When HouYi came back and couldn’t find his wife, he was very sad. It was the fifteenth day of the eighth lunar month of that year.
Today, people eat mooncakes and enjoy the beautiful moon to remember HouYi and ChangE on that day every year.
Eddy Grade 6
那天晚上快10点了,儿子为了交差10来分钟里胡诌的一篇作文。我感觉文章不简练,词汇还需要更贴切一些,文章始终没有点题指出8月15日是中秋节。时态上没错,但还有些其它的语法错误,比如冠词等。.